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May 14, 2009
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I'm letting myself bleed your scent
I'll let you cut my arms again
Hell, I'll even let you cut my neck
At least then you noticed me
You didn't forget that we were in the same room
Now I just see glances of you in the hall
And I feel you looking back with shame
And I must be sick and masochistic
Because I like this little game
At least you're seeing that I'm there
And you don't have to live a lie
If only I could have changed the truth,
I wouldn't feel you want me to die
I know I'm just bothering you
So I'm sorry about that, too.
:iconmic-too-cliche:
continuation of "When All Else Fails"
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:iconbookwormlane:
I absolutely LOVE the beginning and middle! Just some constructive criticism: I like the ending (last two lines), but I think you could make it a little more powerful. The beginning and middle are so deep that they overpower the ending a bit. But I do really, really, really like it!
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:iconmic-too-cliche:
thanks! i'll look at it, but i'm not 100% sure if i'll edit the ending or not. it's just kinda how i felt at the time; i like to stick with gut feelings. =D

and thanks a bunch for the :+fav:!
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:iconbookwormlane:
i completely understand. i'm the same way lol

you're welcome
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:iconpray-for-them:
wow. Nice job! ^^
I just uploaded a poem you might like.
PG14
"Despair".
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